Saturday, March 27, 2010

Child Abuse

Cold were his hands

Hands that hit me.

I lay still, motion-less.

Lest he hurt again

Devil, I saw, felt.

Angst, I felt within.

Begin, when did it?

Unending, it seemed now!

Scamper away, he said.

Everyday, once he finished!

Submitted for Acrostic Only

21 comments:

Leo said...

i applaud u Raash, for u took a road less traveled. u went to the first person view.. and reading and visualizing, this scathed me. the effect was complete. kudos.

gaurav nanda said...

Touched

SiD said...

lovely...superb!!!

Amity said...

you've well presented it as the helpless prey, bravo!

it's just a very painful scenario for an innocent child, and you hit it right!

why it's only now that I've met you here at AO?

Saras said...

Very Good take, refreshingly different, on the prompt. Well done.

Richa said...

I stand in front of u, bow down n give u an applaud...
the first person approach... the sketch of pain... and these lines

"Begin, when did it?
Unending, it seemed now!"

U r superb... kp up!!

Freelancer said...

awesome yaar

shweta said...

dam u rash...it pinched so bad... so bloody bad...

Scribbling Girl said...

I got busy and see what i missed :(
This was a pure brilliance girl :)
Glad i m back in the blog hopping and writing to read masterpieces :)
Loved it :)

Scribbling Girl said...

Awesome :)
Missed your writings as i was hardly blogging
Glad i didnt miss this one
U trapped the point ....something which noone really wanna feel!
Great work

Amias said...

Very touched indeed!

psychedchick said...

Thanks a lot!

psychedchick said...

:)

psychedchick said...

Thank you. Thank you!

psychedchick said...

Thanks :)

But now that you are here, hope to see you often :)

psychedchick said...

Thanks, Richa!

psychedchick said...

Thanks :)

psychedchick said...

I am sorry?

psychedchick said...

Thanks, Fl!

psychedchick said...

Thanks, Amias :)

psychedchick said...

Thanks, SG :P