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Saturday, March 27, 2010

Child Abuse

Cold were his hands

Hands that hit me.

I lay still, motion-less.

Lest he hurt again

Devil, I saw, felt.

Angst, I felt within.

Begin, when did it?

Unending, it seemed now!

Scamper away, he said.

Everyday, once he finished!

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20 comments:

  1. LeoMarch 27, 2010 at 12:53 AM

    i applaud u Raash, for u took a road less traveled. u went to the first person view.. and reading and visualizing, this scathed me. the effect was complete. kudos.

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  2. gaurav nandaMarch 27, 2010 at 1:45 AM

    Touched

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  3. SiDMarch 27, 2010 at 2:12 AM

    lovely...superb!!!

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  4. AmityMarch 27, 2010 at 10:33 AM

    you've well presented it as the helpless prey, bravo!

    it's just a very painful scenario for an innocent child, and you hit it right!

    why it's only now that I've met you here at AO?

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  5. SarasMarch 27, 2010 at 5:02 PM

    Very Good take, refreshingly different, on the prompt. Well done.

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  6. RichaMarch 27, 2010 at 5:12 PM

    I stand in front of u, bow down n give u an applaud...
    the first person approach... the sketch of pain... and these lines

    "Begin, when did it?
    Unending, it seemed now!"

    U r superb... kp up!!

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  7. FreelancerMarch 27, 2010 at 9:05 PM

    awesome yaar

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  8. shwetaMarch 27, 2010 at 9:51 PM

    dam u rash...it pinched so bad... so bloody bad...

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  9. Scribbling GirlMarch 28, 2010 at 12:58 AM

    I got busy and see what i missed :(
    This was a pure brilliance girl :)
    Glad i m back in the blog hopping and writing to read masterpieces :)
    Loved it :)

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  10. Scribbling GirlMarch 28, 2010 at 1:02 AM

    Awesome :)
    Missed your writings as i was hardly blogging
    Glad i didnt miss this one
    U trapped the point ....something which noone really wanna feel!
    Great work

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  11. AmiasMarch 29, 2010 at 10:32 AM

    Very touched indeed!

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  12. psychedchickMarch 30, 2010 at 7:36 AM

    Thanks a lot!

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  13. psychedchickMarch 30, 2010 at 7:36 AM

    :)

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  14. psychedchickMarch 30, 2010 at 7:36 AM

    Thank you. Thank you!

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  15. psychedchickMarch 30, 2010 at 7:37 AM

    Thanks :)

    But now that you are here, hope to see you often :)

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  16. psychedchickMarch 30, 2010 at 7:38 AM

    Thanks, Richa!

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  17. psychedchickMarch 30, 2010 at 7:39 AM

    I am sorry?

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  18. psychedchickMarch 30, 2010 at 7:39 AM

    Thanks, Fl!

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  19. psychedchickMarch 30, 2010 at 7:41 AM

    Thanks, Amias :)

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  20. psychedchickMarch 30, 2010 at 7:41 AM

    Thanks, SG :P

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